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2021，全国i卷
? ? dear terry,
?how are you doing? in your last letter, you asked me about being a guest to a chinese friendm writing to tell you some relevant details.?
? ? to begin with, arrive early is important for you. and you can help the family prepare the dinner. it is meaningful and interesting. besides, youd better bring some gifts, such as a book or a chinese knot. the experience is so meaningful that you should take many pictures.
你能发现作文中第二段的一个语法差错吗？
arrive改为arriving
之后就初步批改作文了
第一段
in your last letter, you asked me about being a guest to a chinese friendm writing to tell you some relevant details.?
1.这两句话可不可以以写成一句话呢？找找这两句话的联络
因果联络.因为你问我了所以我给你写信
批改：you之前加上since/as，句号改逗号now改为小写
2.tell太low了tell换成inform sb of sth
第二段：
再次偏重一切的最初有必要好好写，中心可以写简略句
1.to begin with的连词这个习气极好但后边的语
句过于简略了。
be important 学过他的替换可换为it is of
great significance for you to arrive early
语句写的越具体越好，在这儿咱们可以弥补一个意图，你去那么早要干嘛呢？显着and的后半句就是为了标明意图，为了帮他们一同预备而且and太初级了不能在作文傍边呈现。那具体怎么写呢？表意图用在句中可以你们会想到的是so as to其实这也不是很高档了哈。当然这儿也不能直接用to do那怎么办呢？用in an attempt to?标明的是半句话留心在写了意图之后，early后边加一个逗号，让阅卷教师也缓一口气。
批改：to begin with,it is of great significance for you to arrive early，in an attempt to?help the family prepare the dinner.
it is meaningful and interesting. 也很简略.
问：it指代啥？
答：it指代前文说到的作业所以用which来兼并两句话。
批改：to begin with,it is of great significance for you to arrive early，in an attempt to?help the family prepare the dinner.，which is both meaningful and interesting.
besides用的没缺陷，可是假定改成on the top of that，【除此之外】非常好(这儿要大写哈！)
2.such as 替换为for instance(标明举个比方)可以放在句尾更地道一些。也可以放在句中for instance, book or a chinese knot
3.so...that...倒装
批改：so meaningful is the experience that you are supposed to take more
pictures.
英语作文讲究长短句联系，不要整篇作文都是长句，长句必定要放在最初。短句没有从句的一概算短句。
